Comments : The Dark

  • 5 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A sad piece.
    When we feel this way, we often rely on those around us to pull us back up, but if they are not there when we need them, things become very difficult.

    All the best,

    Ben

  • 5 months ago

    by Pagan Paul

    Sad and melancholic write, nicely penned.
    PPx

  • 5 months ago

    by Brenda

    Such a sad write. It is very hard when someone you normally count on suddenly has left you high and dry. Well done with this

  • 5 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Beautiful emotional piece nicely written x

  • 5 months ago

    by Poetess

    Very emotional write. Such a bad feeling when we reach out for help or comfort to someone we think we can count on, only to realize we're all alone. Thank you for sharing this

  • 5 months ago

    by Tasha

    Thank you all so much! I am glad yet saddened that I am not alone in feeling this way.

  • 4 months ago

    by chandelier

    such an evoking and amazing piece :)

  • 2 months ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I liked this very much. I liked the rhythm almost instantly, and the sentiments put forth are powerful, and beautifully done. The loneliness was blinding. This line "Not a single one..." including the ellipsis was...beautiful. It elevated the feeling of being alone to new heights. The next few lines:
    "No candle to help me find my way
    Not a flicker of its warmth
    My blackest night is my darkest day"
    were so well crafted. Instantly I thought of a single flickering flame amidst the all-encompassing darkness, and how much hope would be poured into that tiny yellow light. How lonely and frightening that would be. And then to be without it... Brutal.

    Those four lines were - for me - the strongest, and most brilliantly written lines, but the last two,
    "Yet this time I fell to the floor
    Your hands didn't reach for mine..."
    again aided wonderfully by the ellipsis, gave the sense of complete sadness, and of giving up, of letting the dark and doom consume you, destroy you.

    A good piece with some spectacular lines.