Comments : Humming-bird (A Collaboration)

  • 4 months ago

    by Ren

    Awww! Y'all! This turned out so beautifully!! WELL DONE! :)

    • 4 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      It did. But we missed you. :-) Many thanks to Patrick.

    • 4 months ago

      by Ren

      So sorry that happened! Hopefully next time! I really should be sleeping but saw this posted and had to read! Y'all did amazing! <3

  • 4 months ago

    by Tony

    I'm seriously loving all of the collaborations Im seeing these days!

  • 4 months ago

    by Em

    Shamazeballs!!

  • 4 months ago

    by Michael

    Nice collaboration the guys, and what I sense from this piece, that there is a nice link between two, in regard to the verses

    Michael :)

  • 4 months ago

    by pmmurphy

    yay this was fun to write :D My parts are terrible tho :P

    • 4 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      haha...maybe both our parts are terrible? Glad they liked it, though. :-)

    • 4 months ago

      by Ren

      Neither of y'alls parts are terrible!! This is excellent!

  • 4 months ago

    by Nicko

    The collaboration of styles is very similar throughout most of this tantalizing flight. The initial theme has a gentle waft which painted me a soft butterfly type Hummingbird only to be clipped mid poem with a harsher tone of a bird, stripped of feathers? An interesting read well done guys!

  • 4 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    Intoxicated in flutter while dancing with the winds made
    me think of someone happily dancing intoxicated maybe even
    with wine glass in hand.

    Second stanza - carried this through but gave a romantic
    slant. I like to think that someone engrossed on the
    setting sun has romance in thier heart.

    Third stanza - Candles fading in her presence links in well
    giving the impression of glowing happiness more brighter than
    candles. Blowing them out implies a required intimacy

    Fourth stanza - I can still imagine our heroine dancing around
    in the moon light

    Fifth stanza - Perhaps her heroine is journeying to see her
    loved one as she finds smiles in the stars and the soft touch
    of the nights winds

    Next three stanzas shows her struggle against the winds and
    it becomes apparent that her struggle to stay upbeat and intact
    is not just during her nights journey but pertenant to her
    every day life.

    The last stanza - heading towards unknown possibilities only
    knowing that I am called to fly is a superb finale
    all in all a wonderful portrayal of a strong happy
    spirit happily heading out on a journey that will challenge her in more
    ways than she knows.

    Well done you two on a great collaboration

    • 4 months ago

      by mossgirl19

      Thank you so much, Milly, for such lovely words.

  • 4 months ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Beautifully done, guys. Delicately written with some lovely alliteration too.
    Collaborations are rarely easy but this one is seamless.

    All the very best,

    Ben

  • 4 months ago

    by AngelaLuisaCory

    I agree with Ben - this is a beautiful piece - I can visualise it in my mind. Well done both.

  • 4 months ago

    by Augustus Black

    Sounds like you are an angel flying far away to an unknown destination. The quality of feelings and wordings you have put in this is quite marvelous. I liked your journey throughout this poem.

    I'm sorry I don't have a title for nominating poems, otherwise I would have sent this poem forward straight away.

    Well done on this.

  • 3 months ago

    by chandelier

    Such a beautiful write. Honestly, I could see the images unfolding in front of my eye of imagination.
    Great work , as always. Added to my favourites:)

  • 1 month ago

    by Mark

    This captures the moments of flight amazingly well. Almost as though the authors wanted to be such a bird, or have had a journey alike this one... Lovely Murphy and Mel