Comments : Lip-reading

  • 8 months ago

    by Ren

    Wow Michael...this is intense and just dripping with fear and uncertainty. The format is perfect as well, creating a profound effect with each line...making the pauses and punctuation seem heavy and menacing in all the right places. Amazing job!

    • 8 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Ren,
      Darkness always floats in the mind :)xx

  • 8 months ago

    by Brenda

    Wow Michael, this was intense! Reminded me of an abusive parent. Well done-

    • 8 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Brenda, intense with truth :)x

  • 8 months ago

    by Hellon

    This was intense..no doubt! I almost felt the mafia present (perhaps they were lol!) I was holding my breath for you..hoping you would get out of this situation unharmed.

    Mmm Just a little type I think

    He would take an lemon. 'a'

    I was one the edge of my seat with this one....seriously!

    • 8 months ago

      by Michael

      Thanks Hellon your not far off!
      and well spotted with 'an' :)x

  • 8 months ago

    by Kitty Cat Lady

    Ouch Michael! The deliberate intimidation seeps all through this ... it's chilling! Twisty but fabulous! :-( x
    =^.^=

    • 8 months ago

      by Michael

      Indeed Miss Kitty, and thank you lady :)x

  • 8 months ago

    by Milly Hayward

    A chilling piece that conjures up images of oppression. Being held prisoner. The observers discomfort, unease and distain vividly portrayed. The presence of a villain with his prey forced to watch him eat. A captivating chilling piece. Best wishes Milly x

    • 8 months ago

      by Michael

      Very well put Miss Milly, and thank you

      I so enjoy and love other writers and readers perspective :)x

  • 8 months ago

    by Dagmar Wilson

    This takes me back in time having dinner with my parents as a child. It was a cold silence him just waiting for me to make a wrong move or say something. Excellent write Michael. All the best and hugs to you

    • 8 months ago

      by Michael

      Spot on Miss Dagmar, and thank you :)x

  • 8 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    Michael! You have done excellently capturing that fear. Felt like I was watching a movie with a terrified child eating with his father. Chilling and captivating at the same time.

    • 8 months ago

      by Michael

      Thank you Miss Mel :)x