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Michael this is yet another fantastically rhymed image filled piece by you which I simply couldn't pass by without nominating as I found it quite fascinating. You words even if ‘simple’ always captivating.
1) I absolutely love this opening it screams to me “I want to speak truths but I'm holding it in for the sake of others and how they will react” a bit like a domino affect. The words you use say that the words you want to speak are hidden deep within your soul ‘words burn holes within our lungs’ but we have to say it therefore the ‘cauldron’ bubbles with the things that go unsaid as they'll ‘shatter hopes and dreams’
2) Firstly, I think the first ‘to’ on line 2 should be ‘too’ please do correct me if I'm wrong. Again, fantastic imagery here and I do believe we are being brainwashed by the news/reading newspapers ‘Black and white’ - I think here refers to the newspaper and due to all the horrendous news many of us are afraid to sleep at night as we cannot be certain if we're next or not so to speak… There's been loads of armed robberies around my area recently and it's pretty scary but never heard it from the horses mouth as they say but still it's unbelievably scary to say the least especially when we get in trouble for defending what we've worked hard for.
3) This made my heart and pulse race and gave me goosebumps.. The imagery is just so powerful and truthful here. Lessons are certainly not learned as it goes round and round in circles can we not just stop the ‘bloody wars’ and be the bigger people? My honest opinion is we can't as too much pride seems to be at stake nowadays.
4) I'd like to say I understand this completely but I'm not so sure though here goes... believe what you're trying to say is the government/presidents/those in charge ‘for heads of states’ have all the money which they then think they have the power to send out fake news to scaremonger us when in fact they are as you so rightly state they have ‘selfish greed’ and want, want, want when they should want for nothing at all if that all makes sense. They also cause a lot of the chaos that is happening on a daily basis as they only scaremonger us so much into hating each other.
5) An absolute fantastic ending to an equally fantastic piece all round. I think here the ‘eggshell’ is our earth which wl indeed ‘crack’ under the pressure of all the hatred though maybe not in our life times.
Your words are so powerful and most certainly intelligent. All the best.
Em xx

Thank you Em for a wonderful analogy, and you are spot-on with it.

The verse you are referring to is the last but one? This really states that 'money' brings power to the heads of all organisations (especially the governments) 'selfish greed' is wasting money on what they believe helps our world, but only helps them so to speak, and the last two lines- I am saying that the 'cartels' which are known as 'drug lords'- I feel resemble politics and governments as the biggest crooks and those cats just get 'fatter' and carry all the power! Hope that makes sense :)x

Can I just saw that this is so fantastic

Regards

Craig

Brilliant and profound Michael! You'd think by now we'd have it all worked out eh? It's all fab but the last two lines in particular leave a lasting impact ... this is so well done! :-) x
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Wow Michael, this is incredible! So much said in these stanzas. Powerful and hard hitting-well done-

This is a well written piece, highlighting the tension that is going on in this world. Like a 'cauldron' the heat and poison is being mixed. This can only end badly. The innocent will suffer for the pig headed few.

I love the quatrains and affective use of meter which helps it read so well. To me, in my mind, this beat like a drum - a war drum, perhaps, being out imminent doom. God save our souls.