Comments : Backstage crushes

  • 5 years ago

    by Em (marmite)

    This is a 'different' kind of write which has really intrigued my mind very much... There's a few typos if you don't mind my saying:
    "And they always gonna hunt a little corner"
    I think this line would flow better without the and maybe use a few fullstops at the beginning here to counteract (I think that's the word) as the 'and' especially as you use 'and' in a sentence further down also 'they' here should be 'they're'
    The end line "they will" again should be "they're"
    Hope you don't mind me saying
    Take care and well done on a very interesting write

    • 5 years ago

      by Eve

      thank you very much.I'm not very good at english that's why there are typos,but thank you for correcting me

  • 5 years ago

    by Milly Hayward

    I'm with Em on the typos but looking beyond them this is a captivating piece about unrequited love, a most interesting read. Best wishes Milly x

    • 5 years ago

      by Eve

      thank you very much!!