Captivating. Each word you wrote defined a new emotion, a new feeling, a new mood to the poem. It was sourceful, and more importantly insightful. Your bitter. blunt, and somewhat voilent thoughts on love are portrayed and pushed into me ears so flawlessly. This was outstanding. It gave the reader [me] insight to your soul, and mind. And I can see it's a beautiful thing. You have done, yet again, an amazing job. No one compares to your work.
I will fashion my comment after your own style, since I find it so appealing. Youâ€™re more than deserving of such praise.
The line: "Thinking upon that cloud they shall find solitude". I imagine a child actually sitting upon that cloud, their chin resting on their fist while they're thoughtful over what *they* did wrong in the mists of their naivety that you well describe.
The line: "How did you all not see those waters? Screams even prevented a lasting breath of air" I imagined someone wiser throwing up their hands in sincere and compassionate frustration, knowing they could not save them but wishing these children would be smarter than they were.
The stanza, and my favorite so far from you: "Perhaps a story written with ink used in the acts of romance as in same of tragedy were all you acquired to dance this masquerade of happy endings". This was a true conquest of words and images played upon the readers mind. Absolutely lovely.
I really loved your use of vocabulary. And this has to be one of the best blank verse poems that I have read in a while. I almost lost intrest somewhere in the middle, but none-the-less it was good. Something told me to continue reading it until the end, and I'm glad that I did. Good job.
wow, your words are incrediable. Your talent way above average, and I just thank you for sharing this with me. I much admire your work, and will continure reading each poem submitted. If you have a moment, I would love for you to look at my poems, and tell me what you think, I would greatly respect your opinion. You do know your poetry......Great job, Love ya Becky