Comments : Love (this is NOT a love poem)

  • 12 years ago

    by Unseen Exposure


    Captivating. Each word you wrote defined a new emotion, a new feeling, a new mood to the poem. It was sourceful, and more importantly insightful. Your bitter. blunt, and somewhat voilent thoughts on love are portrayed and pushed into me ears so flawlessly. This was outstanding. It gave the reader [me] insight to your soul, and mind. And I can see it's a beautiful thing. You have done, yet again, an amazing job. No one compares to your work.

  • 12 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    Poems of life is exactly where I think this belongs. Wonderfully stated, even if extremely dour. Incredible, provocative work yet again, Pink. :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Elizabeth Ann

    I will fashion my comment after your own style, since I find it so appealing. You’re more than deserving of such praise.

    The line: "Thinking upon that cloud they shall find solitude". I imagine a child actually sitting upon that cloud, their chin resting on their fist while they're thoughtful over what *they* did wrong in the mists of their naivety that you well describe.

    The line: "How did you all not see those waters? Screams even prevented a lasting breath of air" I imagined someone wiser throwing up their hands in sincere and compassionate frustration, knowing they could not save them but wishing these children would be smarter than they were.

    The stanza, and my favorite so far from you: "Perhaps a story written with ink used in the acts of romance as in same of tragedy were all you acquired to dance this masquerade of happy endings". This was a true conquest of words and images played upon the readers mind. Absolutely lovely.

    Bravo Alias, I loved this piece.

  • 12 years ago

    by Leah20

    I really loved your use of vocabulary. And this has to be one of the best blank verse poems that I have read in a while. I almost lost intrest somewhere in the middle, but none-the-less it was good. Something told me to continue reading it until the end, and I'm glad that I did. Good job.

  • 12 years ago

    by wayne t

    i like your defintion of love, mine is jaded from years of romance gone bad,but yours sheds a new lite in the way a younger person has the same view, very good

  • 12 years ago

    by TrUtH hUrTs

    how kool are you???
    heh heh pretty kewl by the looks of it ...this is a kickass poem..great work

  • 12 years ago

    by EpithetPoet

    Again, brilliantly said. Your intelligence is conveyed in the way you write your poems.
    -A

  • 12 years ago

    by Steve

    Awesome pro-writing skillz there. Beautifully written; couldn't have described love better myself. What more could be said? keep up the good work!

  • 12 years ago

    by R F

    I really admired the way you think,which was really shown inbetween the lines of this Capturing poem, i like the Wisdom that lies in every single phrase.

    Capturing starts "Darlings, Oceans of screams)

    and this was my fav part:

    Young hearts, do not allow yourselves to be wagered among shallow intension's
    You've hadn't much to grow on and stories told only of happy endings tend to hold little truth

    so much wisdom,i admire that.
    Execllent *5

    with much Respect
    Rua Francis.

  • 12 years ago

    by Becky drake

    wow, your words are incrediable. Your talent way above average, and I just thank you for sharing this with me. I much admire your work, and will continure reading each poem submitted. If you have a moment, I would love for you to look at my poems, and tell me what you think, I would greatly respect your opinion. You do know your poetry......Great job, Love ya Becky

  • 12 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin

    Speechless... Words cannot describe the feelings portayed in this peice. Although bitter, I have to agree with what you had to say. You really are talented. Take care