I think you did an awesome job on this one...excited to read the rest!!! 5/5!

Spot on up untill the last stanza. "Naive" and "me" but im sure you know they dont rhyme. Its just so difficult getting words to rhyme with some other words. Apart from that, its brill. X

even more real i love your poems your on my favorits list... keep writting i can realate to almost everything your write.... xoxox BJ

hey. i love your poems because i can relate to just about everything you write. maybe if you have time come check out mine called numb its really cool. im a cutter too so.....yea we can relate to eachother if you are one. see yaz lataz bye bye hunz