I really don't know where to start when addressing this piece. The words to compliment this poem could never even begin to give you the credit you deserve. I absolutely loved the symbolism in this poem. The way you made this story into a metaphoric, symbolized story is just incredible.
I was extremely captivated by this stanza-
"for an angel to forget his wings then turn back and pray for those to find them
shall never gain those precious feathers for flight to be whole yet again"
It was perfectly worded and had an amazing effect on myself as the reader.
... Also, I really admired these lines;
"Burying her head in her hands to weep, as if grieving a death of a profoundly loved creature too lovely to have fallen, she cries,
"Why are the most pained destined to walk a path alone when they have been handed a treasure to fulfill?"
^Amen. I really loved how you gave questions that would COMPLETELY, AND UTTERLY stump the person you were asking. There is no definate answer for questions such as the ones you presented.
"Never was this splendor given right to abandon all suffrage and erase beings from mind in saving the memory would be same when he returned."
In the poem you constantly use words to describe this creature as "lovely", "angel" and a "spleandor" etc. but then you contradict yourself in the following statements by showing what evil they have presented, which I think is extremely clever. [ I hope that made sense ]
And the ending .... Perfect.
"What would he do if he could see this? Would he have walked out on me? But then I think .... Why would it take showing him this to have him care?"
^ Why does it take betrayal and pain to have the ones we need the most care?
Excellent Michelle. You constantly are amazing me with your wonderful talent and spectacular words.
You often comment bringing forth lines and stanzas of particular beauty. I would wish to do the same thing but cannot easily; simply said, there were too many beautiful and/or poignant lines. Some have already been quoted by others.
Suffice to say that the poem has a somber elegance, akin to a rose crushed that is being carefully quickened by another's tender ministrations. Truly beautiful.
I really like this poem. It means a lot for life not just for me, but I'm sure it means a lot to the rest of the people that read it too. Great piece. Maybe you could stop by my poems sometime and read some of mine. They're not as great as some of yours that I have read, but I'd like to get comments and stuff to see how I can upgrade my skills :) And once again, great poem:):)
Well done, that was really elegantly and well put piece of writing, The flow of the poem was enjoyable and I enjoyed the meaning I put to it, I don't normally like long poems because generally they lose interest but this poem captivated me right up till the end, keep writing and take care