im soo sorry about your brother as well. I think the message was very sweet and amazing.. but i think you could loose the repition in 4th line because it really doesnt fit in with your stanzas...
my deepest wishes go out to your brother
great poem very touching I loved it, Im truly sorry about your brother and hope that he will recover soon.
P.S. thanks for all the comments it really means alot to mean Ill read most of yours later on I have an appointment I have to go to in 30 minutes.