wow....yet another great poem. I real admire your writing. I wish I could write something like this. Sometimes I feel like I just want to be dark, like, there's an evil lurking inside me that needs to escape. I want to keep reading your poems for inspiration. :) Keep it up! Seriously
EXTREGANT....thats was wonderful...i love it...the image of the words is so real...your words were perfect in describing what you wanted to show...the feeling i get from reading this is completely awsome...i feel as though i were in the arms of someone...like i felt what you wrote...
Sorry if i went in to deep..i just wanted to say that was great ! ! !
(read mine if you wish...they won't be as good at all, but i like to hear how i can improve)
Thats great. good at the rhyming and it has a great story line. i luved how you ended it.
"once again he kissed me, this time i kissed back, two dark souls together, both evil and black" that was just a perfect finishing for this poem.
The poem is captivating...every time i wanted to stop reading...it drew me back into it....this poem has magical powers...dark and sinester....very enjoyable...flows very smoothly...keep it up..."read my Arabian sands" and "Gifts of Sorrow" vote and comments appreciated. 5/5
I love this...i found the whole idea original and unique in concept. the imagery you created here was beautiful, really creates vivid pictures for the reader. flow was good throughout except for the line 'as he watched my body' no matter which way you pronounce it, body and me dont really rhyme, so that kind of throws the flow. apart from there however, i love this. beautifully dark and elegantly written.