This is one that I submit everywhere. And it usually gets some good responses. enjoy

This is good. I especially liked:

"the pain brightened the day
opened my senses like a needle in my thumb
instant satisfaction foaming from my wrist"

You're a great writer. Thanx for commenting on my poem :)

xoxoRachel

Thats the type of poem i really like! Great job and keep writing!

wow that was great.....very heart breaking....i'll give it a 5/5