I like this one. Nice work. :) ~B

That was different...I like it. The part about the little sister almost made me cry...it doesn't have a strict rhyme scheme which usually bothers me but this one it didn't, it was good! You've definitly got talent, so keep it up!
xoxo-Sierra Rae

very touching...... the end is very powerfull.... i really hope u dont feel this way thou...hang in there

*~peace and love~*

THank you all.....I do not feel this way anymore....I did...I went through a hard time, and I still try to get through life at times....but all in all everything is good. Thank you all for your comments!

That was so good. i liked a lot of different parts of that. 5/5

Yea, i went thru feeling like that too...im kinda still feeling that way but i forgot to say...that i lkd all of it. cuz i said i lkd a lot of different parts of it, well i did, but it makes it sound like i didnt like ur whole poem. or just..to me it does, but i did like the whole thing.

Oh wow...i feel like this sometimes...this is a really good poem...i could feel your pain...i could see your mangled body with your sister lying next to it...excellent job...5/5.