I love the words you use in this!breed, concede, persevere, masks, they make it more interesting.
i like this, but i don't really get the subject, and the subject is like the most important element, so i'm gonna give you 3/5 on this.
That is some serious heavy rhyming.... Not sure that i like it as much as your other style. Though, for this style, its probably the best I've read... But I like the other...rawer works of yours...they give you a lot more freedom.