Comments : Slowly Choking...

  • 12 years ago

    by Amanda Bee

    I like this poem. I liked the way it flowed and I loved the last stanza. Good job:)

  • 12 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    I love the words you use in this!breed, concede, persevere, masks, they make it more interesting.
    i like this, but i don't really get the subject, and the subject is like the most important element, so i'm gonna give you 3/5 on this.

  • 12 years ago

    by Hard2Heal

    This is a VERY good poem. i think that the internal rhyming is well balanced and its a very well written poem. keep it up :-)
    ~Hard2Heal

  • 10 years ago

    by Lenny

    That is some serious heavy rhyming.... Not sure that i like it as much as your other style. Though, for this style, its probably the best I've read... But I like the other...rawer works of yours...they give you a lot more freedom.