Outstanding work... great flow.. strong point

Good poem! I liked it a lot.

-Taylor

Ooh, good poem. i love all the raw emotion in it and all the dramatic language. good poem. nice flow and rhythum. well done. keep it up.
xxx

Wow neat poem, has a drunkiness effect. No using drugs, stay in school ;0

I really like the intensity vibe within this. I also like the quick flow! These lines really stood out to me:

"Concluding with an invader
In brown liquid form
As we play like a wader
In a fierce thunder storm"

Great job~Holly

I really liked this poem but lets see to me it's like everything you can think about could be bad and stuff but who needs the pills because that's stupid to me that's what i think you were trying to say or how many people commit suicide sometimes. I think that's what you were trying to get out but if you weren't then that's what i got out. Great job though keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

Good...very good nice job 5/5

Why of all things whisky? but still rhyme was good, flow was good,so 4