• 12 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    Geez, so beautiful I really don't what to say. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by just_genes

    The denseness of text in this works well to convey the harried multitude of thoughts that whirl through our minds. Good work.

  • 11 years ago

    by Jason

    A simple message written in a very elequent and thought provocing way.

    LIVE life

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    I'm speechless...
    This is so deep, thoughtful... excellently written. The firs part of the poem about habits and routine reflect some of my thoughts and opinions on that matter and it is truly excellently written, and sadly, it is all so true.
    The second part of the poem is very inspirational and it really brought the smile to my face. After telling all that in the beginning of this piece you express your opinion that the hope still exist. I especially like the lines:
    -And upon waking
    we must remember
    we are gods of destiny
    weilding a power of our own control-
    The ending of the poem is so effective, two last lines wrapped the poem together and they make the deepest statement in the whole piece.
    Excellent job!

  • 10 years ago

    by Oceansoul

    I liked the rhytm ( although I'm not good enough in that section of poetry to tell if there was a specific one-if so I'd like to know )
    "and sometimes we must
    chew a leg off to escape. "
    I think a pause after " sometimes "would be better for the rhytm ?
    very enjoyable piece of work , thanks for sharing it with the world

  • 8 years ago

    by Rocky

    I trully lie this peice. it is very inspirational. makes me think about what i am becoming and wether it is what i want to be. i really liked the words "all is always possible-
    it is never too late,
    there is always a different path,
    always the option of choice, "
    honestly a great poem