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  • 12 years ago

    by Kirsty

    Great poem brad this one is so deep and well written I'll keep looking out for your stuff...do same for me...
    It's a great poem keep writing
    kirsty

  • 12 years ago

    by Bradley

    ...dude..thats a really good poem...if its based on something that actually happened then....whoa...dude..i feel for u. Thanks for voting on mine as well...and yea...the Bradleys of this world have to stick together! keep voting on my poems and ill do the same! Laters

  • Nice poem, really powerful and well written. I like your choice of words aswell.

    XxX Cici XxX

  • 12 years ago

    by -->>Vicky

    Damn..thats nice n deep!!! i really like it..keep on writing,..u good!..
    if u get a chance plz check out sum of mah poems...i will appreciate it

  • 11 years ago

    by Esther Wathen

    Wow. thats all i have to say. this was just amazing.

  • 11 years ago

    by sarah

    Yet another great poem keep them coming 5/5 sarah x

  • 11 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Get on the boat or drown
    by Bradley Peter

    I always saw this coming
    now your stuck in the sand
    I'm trying to reach you
    but you just won't take my hand

    I'm only trying to help
    trying to help you to survive
    but you'd rather just be gone
    and just not stay alive

    what are you saying
    how can you say i don't care
    look behind your back
    is there any one else there

    you blame me for your scars
    and you say its all my fault
    i tried my best to stop
    you from ever getting caught

    if you'd have just done what i ask
    you wouldn't be burning in the fire
    it hurts too much to watch
    this was never my desire

    you hate me i can see
    its written in your eyes
    you couldn't take control
    now I'm the one you despise

    i just want to see you saved
    because you've suffered long enough
    tried to have your cake and eat it
    but things just got too tough

    the rocks started mounting
    they all just fell on top
    you blame me for the landslide
    but i tried to make it stop

    your excuses leave you out
    so i take all the blows
    bruised so much i can't breathe
    and in my broken body it shows

    but if you don't want my help
    what else can i do
    I'm too tired to keep on trying
    so i guess me and you are through

    A great poem
    Nothing out of place.
    Perfected to perfection as they say

  • 11 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    So sad...so very very sad
    =(
    I could never be this good..despite what you say.
    ~Em
    ; (

  • 11 years ago

    by Kelc

    Wow, this is really good. it makes me wanna cry! lol your poems all have lots of feeling in them. sorry about askin, i was just curious. i think its great that you can put yourself in someone elses place when you write. not many people can do that!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jamie Lorraine

    That was so deep with emotion. your poems really have feeling

    -Jamie

  • 9 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Dang this is so sad. It's amazing how you put urself in the spot of someone else and write as if it was your own situation. Awesome job.
    -vino

  • 9 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Deeply moving peiece, I am honest as well I love how you keep the i's lower case it really adds to the poem, I like the second staza the best it has almost a muscail quailty to it. The flow is great, the emotion strong, you couldn't have done much to improve this peice, it is wonderfully written 5/5

  • 6 years ago

    by Raven

    This poem somewhat portrays what most of my dreams are... The "one" man in my life saving, usually I'm saved....but few times I wasn't..... Love the poem though, I love reading your work.... Mine sucks i know, but sometimes i have my moments.

  • 2 months ago

    by Lucifer

    I just hope this poem is not about the girl you mentioned in most of your poems.
    Very emotional.

    • 2 months ago

      by Bradley Peter

      No, no, not to fear, tis complete fiction, sir.

      Thank you for the comment.

  • 2 months ago

    by Jenny Paradise

    I got a little teary eyed. But it was amazing.