I must admit, I don't quite get the ending of this poem. However, I like how you use your metaphors.

My favourite stanza:

"Hes out to get you
Tear your flesh apart
Hes looking to mend
His broken heart "

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

I love it!!! I acually know how this feels!! I expecially like the part about the phone cause when i'm alone it always scares me!!! Keep it up!!

Marie

Wow...very ...dark! 5/5

Wow, i loved this. Soooooooo dark !! I love the opening and ending. They work really well.

XxX Cici XxX

Ha i like this poem alot!! 5/5 deffinately! Keep it up!
Becky
xoxo

This is a truly amazing piece. It is very efficient throughout and the use of metaphors is excellent. I am really impressed by your talent. The diction, and the structure all help develop the meaning of the poem. The poem flows very well. Keep it up.

Wow very very good you have a alot of talent keep it up
5/5
Leona

This one seems like a reverse to Revenge. great, nonetheless. your title should be And then. since thats what it said at the end

Wow that was DEEP...i really enjoyed it...i mean everybody is scared to be alone in they house even thou its all dark and everything is secure...our mindz just go crazy like that...5/5...very poetic

Very unusual poem. It's like a step by step suspense. Nice job. you can still add more imagery and details. keep it up

Awsome dark poems hun! I loved it! It was ver original and I loved it!

Amazing job. i have some of my poems that just end like that i should put them up on here. but i love poems endings like that because you don't know what happened next and you can draw your own conclusion which is great. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.
Ps thanks for the comments.

5/5....You have such a creative way.....I'm still making someof it out in my head...But I LOVE your style girl...Awesome...

I think you should title it ...
Whispers In The Dark ????? Yes No Maybe So??? I kinda like that...lol...
Anyways...5/5
ttyl
Ash

Nice poem! Keep it up!