This is a truly amazing piece. It is very efficient throughout and the use of metaphors is excellent. I am really impressed by your talent. The diction, and the structure all help develop the meaning of the poem. The poem flows very well. Keep it up.
Amazing job. i have some of my poems that just end like that i should put them up on here. but i love poems endings like that because you don't know what happened next and you can draw your own conclusion which is great. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.
Ps thanks for the comments.