Comments : Inside your words

  • 11 years ago

    by Laura

    Very emotionally packed and ver deep.
    The ending was superb and really brought the whole thing together.
    My other favorite stanza is :
    And that perfect hue of gray
    that rolls off every syllable
    with such honesty
    paralyzes my intentions
    and forces me to listen...
    I really made a connection with you as the author of this poem as I can relate to the words you have written.
    Fantastic write.

  • 11 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    OMG...This rocks!! I don't even know where to begin!

    "I'm suffocating
    in your colorful world
    of heartbreaking imagery,"

    I love those lines...such vivid imagery and an interesting perspective.

    Then there's this part:

    "And that perfect hue of gray
    that rolls off every syllable"

    Wow! Well done my friend!
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 11 years ago

    by C Cattaway

    Well, some people try and try, and some are just born with it.. You are one of these gifted people who seem to make every word count, and leave me wanting more. You are amazing. I love this poem too. xx

  • 11 years ago

    by Steven Beesley

    Melissa, the words you choose were poignant, the imagery was superb and the flow was impecable. Wonderful write.

    Warmest regards,

    Steve

  • 11 years ago

    by amandaa

    I'll have to copy Seyella's "it took my breath away" to put my awe into words. Amazing, wonderful, extraordinary.

  • 11 years ago

    by amandaa

    I'll have to copy Seyella's "it took my breath away" to put my awe into words. Amazing, wonderful, extraordinary.

  • 11 years ago

    by Ariana

    Wow I'm totally amazed at your work. Your words flow effortlessly and they are vivid and full of emotion. Excellent write :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Jessica

    That was very good! i loovedd the last stanza! it was brilliant.. wow.. your an amazing poet, just keep it up!

  • 10 years ago

    by kimberly

    Really deep i like alot! It's awesome!

  • 2 years ago

    by DarkLight

    I'm suffocating
    in your colorful world
    of heartbreaking imagery,
    but I bow
    at the exquisite details
    that leave a trail
    to your lovely broken heart...

    This stanza is just on point. I need no say too much or I will ruin the moment.

    I'm hooked by the belly
    in your breathtaking scenery
    of unusual wordplay
    and I cannot breathe,
    so if your voice
    is not meant to kill
    then I'm dying
    for no reason at all...

    Well written. Choice of words is really great. This should have won. I will give it a try.