Comments : The Military Man

  • 12 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Wow this poem really blew me away.. I must say that this has to be one of your best in my opinion. I loved all of it. It flowed very well, and held so many emotions. My favorite stanza was:
    Too many secrets locked in an enchanted box,
    Of which I should never myself hold the key.
    For never should I pick the lock you have made.
    I can not force you to reveal what you refuse.
    —Weaken those lies you have been told.
    Great job on this! 5/5***

  • 12 years ago

    by Bianca

    I had to reread this poem because I could not believe how eloquent and beautiful this piece was- I haven't read a poem that made me really feel like that in a while.

  • 12 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Wonderful poem. Sad yet tender at the same time. By the way, I'm from Wyoming.^-^

  • 12 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was really good. And I hate that, Cause I never know what to say in my comments. Theres nothing I can critize, I loved it all. It was beautiful. Just keep on writing. You really do have talent! I loved it!! 5/5

    `taleee xx

  • 12 years ago

    by swill

    Wow Kali, that is SO BEAUTIFUL. I think you'e inspired me to write about a patriotic theme....I'll write soon...this poem rreally captured the agony of a sodier, of how he wants peace, but must kill to live....sad....keep it up...Dhaval

  • 12 years ago

    by lost_laureate

    A genuinely profound piece of work. I wonder where such inspiration comes from sometimes! You really step inside and amplify the voice of your poems. I liked what you did with the last lines of each stanza it was almost like an aside...yet the monosyllabic, starkness at times maintained that air of being in the military. Exceptional...


  • 12 years ago

    by Emma

    Beautifully written....a great piece...Nice job...
    Emma 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Sondos

    This was a very powerful poem and i really liked it it sounded very profound and was easy on the tongue despite it being quite lengthy. V. good


  • 12 years ago

    by Poetically Speaking

    That is beautiful. I need to start writing like that more than I do now. I admire your words, as I myself am in the army. I just wish more people would understand, but you can't unless you were in our boots. Excellent my dear. I am going to save this.

    Best Stanza:

    Too many things I can not understand,
    Yet the world you reside within makes sense.
    What you consider to be a band of brothers,
    Makes me break down when you have gone.

  • 12 years ago

    by Ed or Ian Henderson

    Interesting and poignant. And your eager voice may NOT be unheard. :-)

  • 12 years ago

    by Timothy r

    "Entwined sadness roping your heart"! just fascinating words to use, I loved this poem, and I will definitely read more. Thanx, Timothy r

  • 12 years ago

    by Amanda

    Hey I really love this poem. It was so full of thoughts and emotions. gives you a clear picture about what you are reading. You are very talented. keep up the great work. Amanda :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Laura

    Wow i am speechless for once...great job. every time i read one of your poems i fall deeper in love with your style of much talent entwined with passion always makes for a n awesome read! 5/5 no doubt!

  • 12 years ago

    by Meggie33

    OMG that was so deep, it had such great meaning and depth to it i cant even believe it - when i made that post that you responded to i never thought i would be led to find such meaningful poetry. You have amazing talent, it is truely unbelievable.


  • 12 years ago

    by Ashley Van Eperen

    Your use of language, and description was incredable. great poem 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Wow, this poem was so unique! I've never read anything like it! Gah! All your poems are so good! Your flow was good, and I loved the words you chose! This is one of those poems that take your breath away!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jennifer

    WOW...I'm glad you asked me to read this because this poem was feeling with so much talent and kinda left me speechless, I reread it a couple of times just because it was soooo good, I love this poem and now since I've read this one I will read alot more of your writing...great job 5/5
    always jennifer

  • 12 years ago

    by J Lau

    Wow... Great write! I love the structure of the poem and your own unique style of writing. The poem was so powerful, emotional and deep. Keep up the great write! 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Again, a great poem, thats well written and makes sense,
    I agree with the others, this poem is really deep and emotional, well written

  • Wow!! This poem blew me away!! You are a wonderful writer!! One of your best!! Wouldnt change a thing!! 5/5!!