Wow.. i really like this poem.. its very optimistic.. i like that .. the only thing is that a few lines dont flow as well as the rest.. but dont worry i get that problem all the time.. but i still think its a really great poem.. i like it a lot.. great job!!
and if get a chance maybe you can check out some of my poems =)
11 years ago
by Robie Lincer
Wow this poem was very very well wriitennn... well penned ;)
This poem had a sadness to it however it was also very inspirational.
I can really relate as I have friends who are going through the same thing and I would do anything to be there for them in their time of need.
I like how you repeated that one stanza as it was not over done.
I also like the flow and the rhymes did not sound forced. Great write!!
THis poem was so sweet, and even inspirational. It shows the reader that yes YOU can get through it because there is someone there to help you. I think it would have been even more effecctive if you elaborated a bit on the story behind it. Tell a bit about the friends porblems and how they can get through them.
Still it is a very touching poem, and has the potenetial to be very amazing!!! Good luck ;)