Comments : The Bench

  • 12 years ago


    "Sometimes a child will take a seat
    To gather up the thoughts
    Of fairy tales and legends
    And images that time forgot."

    The whole poem is great, but that stanza just rocks!
    Well done, Mom! Love ya~Holly

  • 12 years ago

    by Lu

    OMG I can't believe I have just come across Holly's mom .....Glad to meet you .

    The imagery you have created in this piece is amazing .A wonderfully written piece that paints a clear picture with words.

    Sometimes at night they come and sit
    To nurse a broken heart
    Or some come just to cry a bit
    When their lives fall all apart.
    Last line in this stanza I would maybe change to :
    When their lives fall apart or
    When their lives have fallen apart

    Great write !

  • 12 years ago

    by Sourav

    Beautiful to say the least. Wonderfully written... Loved it!

  • 12 years ago

    by ~yOu EnVy Me ~

    You are so good at this
    how do these things just come to you?
    this is great 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by pilar ann

    The bench.. you gave me a whole of things to think about.. i love this poem of yours.. i love the way you write.. it haunts me..

    ~pilar ann

  • 11 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    Comment #4:
    I have absolutely no negative thing to say when I read your stuff. I feel extremely inadequate to critique you! There's no way I would think of myself talented enough to say that you should change this or that. There's really nothing to change. :) Keep it up!
    ~Midnight Sun