I love this poem, But it's so sad. I write poems like this too. But you know.. theres more to life then cutting your wrists & stuff like that!. I tell everyone that but I dont fallow it. lol. But anyway if you have msn add me firstname.lastname@example.org if you ever want to talk. alright bye
This is really sad---I also had the same question as .x.Natalie.x. I kindof thought that the ''chose''was supposed to be ''choice'' Everythime I reached that stanza I read choice because thats what sounds right. Beside that it flows very smoothly. You have a lot of talent! 5/5 stay strong--
Great job! The first stanza rhymes kind of confused me, as you rhymed "away" with "away" but also threw "way" in there, so the other line was kind of excluded. A bit confusing.
But otherwise, great job. The flow was great, 5/5
I didn't understand this line at first, maybe put a comma between "fun" and "others" it would make it flow better.
Also "Deserted by chose" It should be choice:)
Other than that, great poem, i loved the story of it and I'm sure a lot of people on this site can relate to everything said in this, I know i can. I liked the rhymes, they were subtle, but they were there. Great work.