Awwwww.. that is soo sweet! that was just so beautiful.. lol, way better than my wedding poem :P this flow and rhymes worked excellently.. the descriptions were great.. as was the imagery.. i cant wait till i get married :P nice write! 5/5
"I passed out and awake to dawn."
awoke, not awake
"Then I heard the voice of you,"
only awkwardly constructed line in the poem
Great stanzas with lots of details, particularly the first three. I really enjoyed the rhythm, though some parts felt strange reading out loud because they were slant rhymes (ear/hair -- dipthong problems) (veil/detail -- not a slant rhyme but a stressed syllable problem, veil has the stress on the vowel sound that detail doesn't...)