Comments : Perfect Little Girls Suicide Story

  • 11 years ago

    by **~Lucy~**

    Wow that was amazing words cant really describe how i feel about this because i sort of felt the same emotions as the girl in your poem felt a deffeinet 5/5 off me hunni

    love
    lucy
    xxxxxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Sabrina

    Nice... liked it a lot :) 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Cayce

    Wow.. that was so powerful and emotional. I really enjoyed reading it! I found a few little mistakes though.

    "her parent were devastated"
    Parent should be parents.

    "the called her cinderella, who left the ball"
    The should be they.

    "in the note thier note the daughter wrote"
    I'm not sure but I think you meant "In the not their daughter wrote"

    "and for them not to worrry"
    Worrry should be worry.

    "and that was where thet found her body"
    Thet should be they.

    Other than those mistakes it was really good. It had a good message at the end. Keep up the good work!

  • 11 years ago

    by Sarah

    That was amazing!

  • 11 years ago

    by TRAGiC BEAUTY

    Amzing! I could feel the emotion! You are a great writer! Keep up the good work!

    Love-n-Laughter
    Shelby

  • 11 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    Wow this is so good yet so sad at the same time.

  • That story were the girl died sumtimes i wish that girl was me:( thankx i luved the poem love mak

  • 11 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Great poem-it kept my attention the whole way through-and I like how it tells a story 5/5 good write

  • 11 years ago

    by ShatteredGirl

    The poem wast terrific, i loved it. it meant alot to me n i bet to alot of others too. excellent!

  • 11 years ago

    by twisted faith

    Wow, impressive.so many people feel tht way and hopefully none will take it tht far. gr8 poem and it gives people a lot to think of

  • 11 years ago

    by Just Another Dreamer

    I liked this poem a lot. I know what it feels like to be that girl. And I do like how you end your poem. The one part in particular that I really found that caught my eye was the line that said,

    "she found she could no longer live
    in the place she thought was hell"

    But again, I did think it was very good. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by fakegreeneyes

    I like it too...its hella sad...

  • Wow... amazing job, that definitely spoke to a lot of people. It's great that you used your talent to turn a sad story into a poem with a great message. 5/5.. awesome.
    Al

  • 11 years ago

    by *~*pureconfusion15*~*

    Wow thats a really awsum poem!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Broken Suicide

    I think this is great, you're a really good writer and this poem will touch so many people. It has sure touched my heart. 5/5 keep up the good work.. xxLezxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Golden 101

    .... speechless...WOW!!!!!.....why give 5/5 when u can give 10/5...nice work. pce+ luv-later

  • 11 years ago

    by tornsoul

    I absolutely loved it...send me more!

  • 11 years ago

    by Spitfire

    I love ur poems and now i added u to my favs
    5/5
    great job

  • 11 years ago

    by Electric Monkey

    Simply amazing! I know how you feel. So many of my friends don't want to stay, but don't know the pain they leave behind. Thank you so much!

  • 11 years ago

    by Silent Screams

    Great poem i love it so much my best friend just commited sucide and my other best friend tried meany times then i tried but i will never do that again the pain is just to much knowing that your friend is gone forever and that nothing can bring them back your poem is well wirtten
    aunabeth