Comments : I could have...

  • 11 years ago

    by Bill Turner

    Beautifully done. Great allusions and such power. I love it.

  • 11 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    Outstanding! It's simple but so brilliant.
    The emotional impact of this is astounding.
    You have a gift and I'm very thankful that you continue to share it with us!
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 11 years ago

    by Laura

    Very original write!! short but forceful...good job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Gary Jurechka

    This defies words.A sincere, heartfelt love poem then tempered with misunderstanding, even mistrust and a sense of sadness and loss..Some things start out so perfect and beautiful then turn into something sad, angry, totally diffeernt.How does this happen?You have captured so much, so well here.
    Peace,
    Gary

  • 10 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Nice and tight this work of yours. keep up the good writes...

  • 9 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    I liked this poem it was different. I would like to see more poems like this one. The flow was good and the word choice was different. I see nothing that needs changing. It would have been nice if it was a little longer though. 5/5