Comments : I could have...

  • 12 years ago

    by Bill Turner

    Beautifully done. Great allusions and such power. I love it.

  • 12 years ago


    Outstanding! It's simple but so brilliant.
    The emotional impact of this is astounding.
    You have a gift and I'm very thankful that you continue to share it with us!
    Take care and keep it up~Holly

  • 12 years ago

    by Laura

    Very original write!! short but forceful...good job!

  • 12 years ago

    by Gary Jurechka

    This defies words.A sincere, heartfelt love poem then tempered with misunderstanding, even mistrust and a sense of sadness and loss..Some things start out so perfect and beautiful then turn into something sad, angry, totally diffeernt.How does this happen?You have captured so much, so well here.

  • 11 years ago

    by Tom Swart

    Nice and tight this work of yours. keep up the good writes...

  • 9 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    I liked this poem it was different. I would like to see more poems like this one. The flow was good and the word choice was different. I see nothing that needs changing. It would have been nice if it was a little longer though. 5/5