Congrats it was beautiful. i think that this is a gr8 message to the world. i love this so much! i also like how you used such large words, and the wording was beautiful. 5/5

I really like this poem because it;s the truth. Your rhyme scheme and use of diction is great. This has a great message in it. 5/5

I love the last stanza. Very understandable and great flow

*nOni

I love this poem! Its got a great meassage in it.
Gr8 work...5/5
Take care

Very sad ending. I loved the poem. From the poem I think you have alot of soul, and a tender heart.

That's truely beautiful Sean. The descriptive details, well the poem is inspirational.
"Keep on the right path, let your conscience run free,
for if you do not, you will end up like me."

That certainly made the think, to have you're conscience clouded, would that mean you'll never truely feel free?

One thing, is it meant to be 'ora' or should it be 'aura'?

Perfect. A really wonderful piece. x

Wow. This by far had to be one of the BEST poems I have ever read. Very deep.

I relate to that so well. Very well put, very much the truth~*

I love this poem. You are an amazing writer.

I love the whole idea........its a very beatiful piece of writing, keep the good work up. not many has ur gift.

Wow very meaningful.. i like last bit where it says "you will end up like me"
...i wish i could write that good =(
5/5 great poem

Well done greate poem!

Beautiful message - something for everyone to read.

congratulations for making it to the tops!

peace
shobhana

What an awesome depiction. very vivid use of words. loved it!
VByers

Great peom with good flow and language.DO MORE!!!

That was so strong i hope that i can write like you someday
~Charlla May~ :)

There are few things in life when something is so beatiful you are left speechless as how to describe it greatness this is exactly that
Take care
Hs

That's a lot of deep emotions. You put it well on paper. Good job!

Oh, i like it. ur a really good writter. its like ur trying to protect people from becomeing something like u. i am doing the same thing.
love willow xxoo

Omg.... wow. amazing. congratulations, you completely deserved to win. this is a wonderful poem, and it's got a marvelous message... the end of it was especially wonderful. keep writing, you'll get far.