Comments : The Great Battle

  • 11 years ago

    by Wasted Fake Smiles

    Congrats it was beautiful. i think that this is a gr8 message to the world. i love this so much! i also like how you used such large words, and the wording was beautiful. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by ABrookeD

    I really like this poem because it;s the truth. Your rhyme scheme and use of diction is great. This has a great message in it. 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    I love the last stanza. Very understandable and great flow

    *nOni

  • 11 years ago

    by Tormented

    I love this poem! Its got a great meassage in it.
    Gr8 work...5/5
    Take care

  • 11 years ago

    by loretta Taylor

    Very sad ending. I loved the poem. From the poem I think you have alot of soul, and a tender heart.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kara !

    That's truely beautiful Sean. The descriptive details, well the poem is inspirational.
    "Keep on the right path, let your conscience run free,
    for if you do not, you will end up like me."

    That certainly made the think, to have you're conscience clouded, would that mean you'll never truely feel free?

    One thing, is it meant to be 'ora' or should it be 'aura'?

    Perfect. A really wonderful piece. x

  • 11 years ago

    by Melissa

    Wow. This by far had to be one of the BEST poems I have ever read. Very deep.

  • 11 years ago

    by Dimari

    I relate to that so well. Very well put, very much the truth~*

  • 11 years ago

    by Jessica

    I love this poem. You are an amazing writer.

  • I love the whole idea........its a very beatiful piece of writing, keep the good work up. not many has ur gift.

  • 11 years ago

    by Gabby

    Wow very meaningful.. i like last bit where it says "you will end up like me"
    ...i wish i could write that good =(
    5/5 great poem

  • 11 years ago

    by Anton

    Well done greate poem!

  • 11 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Beautiful message - something for everyone to read.

    congratulations for making it to the tops!

    peace
    shobhana

  • 11 years ago

    by The Undoing

    What an awesome depiction. very vivid use of words. loved it!
    VByers

  • 11 years ago

    by ...Vince...

    Great peom with good flow and language.DO MORE!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Charlla

    That was so strong i hope that i can write like you someday
    ~Charlla May~ :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Hurtingsoul

    There are few things in life when something is so beatiful you are left speechless as how to describe it greatness this is exactly that
    Take care
    Hs

  • 11 years ago

    by Shannon

    That's a lot of deep emotions. You put it well on paper. Good job!

  • 11 years ago

    by Willow

    Oh, i like it. ur a really good writter. its like ur trying to protect people from becomeing something like u. i am doing the same thing.
    love willow xxoo

  • 11 years ago

    by Thoughtless Consideration

    Omg.... wow. amazing. congratulations, you completely deserved to win. this is a wonderful poem, and it's got a marvelous message... the end of it was especially wonderful. keep writing, you'll get far.