You write pretty deep i can almost recognize a few words. My english sucks but here i'm doing what i can. I like what you write. I may add you to my fav.

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Charlie

Great free flowing imagery

This is a fantastic poem...its both serious and amusing, the use of colours draws the reader in and creates a wonderful distinction/contrast between the objects they describe - the bright orange of the swimsuit compared to the dull green of the 'grunge'.

Not too bad.. I relaly didn't like the way you broke up the lines here ((formatting)), it just seemed wrong for the poem... But you used wonderful words and told a very different story... Good job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

I really don't know if I knw the meaning of this poem nevertheless I enjoyed reading the words and your unique capturing descriptions. Especially the part (Correction) as though formal but with a hint of something else if I'm not wrong.