I really enjoyed this poem. It had a very nice flow, and was packed with emtion. Great job. 5/5.

Wow, this was so full of emotion and hatred. I loved it. It was amazing and it showed your talent. Keep your head up my Dear. 5/5 =]]

-Jenna.

Amazing. The words packed a powerful punch. You have a very good way of expressing yourself.. may God help you get rid of the anger and the pain.

God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

Oh my, dear, such a beautiful sad penned you potray here, so breathtaking write, yet beautiful emotions....... whatever, i wish everything will fine soon, take care,...bert ~

Sherry-Lynn,
My heart aches for you deary, the physical and emotional pain you have gone through is just terrible .
I know God says we must forgive, but how do we bring ourselves to forgive something as what you have gone through . The only thing I could do "if I were you that is" is to put my trust in God . I am no 'Holy Lady' by any means but I have gone through some pretty difficult things in my lifetime . And I can only say from my experience is " that God has always been there for me in times of need"

I hope you find the peace you so rightfully deserve Sherry-Lynn .

I am just a mess of tears now, this piece has truly touched my heart .

Take care, Sherry-Lynn

So much hurt and pain thru out this whole poem. oh gee. wish this never happened to anyone. so sad to hear it does. i know it does.

5/5 David

One truly emotional poem, one that puts your mind in where you were, good writing, deserves a top 5/5

You have put here great thoguhts. i like the longing ofwords. how you attach words wiht another stanza words. its an art. you have talent.
takecare 5/5

This is very very heartfelt feeling.

Whats a fantasic write....:) 5/5

My heat aches for you and im so glad you are not in this situation anymore. no one deserves that. I loved it, it was so moving and powerful. a great read
xx
Taegan Emily

Beautiful poem
sorry for ur sadness
xx

No longer yearning your touch
Searching hysterically for a hideaway
`This gave me one of the most powerful images I've ever imagined from poetry -- the use of "hysterical" made the words so much more potent. I could just feel the emotion.

The biggest secret that I have hid
Shocking it appears to be
Is praying nightly for your death
Violent and brutal may it be
`Oh, hauntingly beautiful ending. I've never seen one like it and I respect you dearly for writing these words. Many of my friends get abused and they won't accept hate -- just the pain and the sadness. They wont come straight out and say how they really feel inside because they're so afraid. Thank you, because this gives me hope that one day, they will finally leave and be able to stand up for themselves.

Now on the typical stuff that I critique people on, the flow was rocky, and the length of stanzas alternated flimsly for me, but despite that, your choice of vocabulary was gripping. It started out subtle, and just burst into climax with a explosion of beautifully picked words.

Well done.
..__MiNDYY