Comments : Ten Things I Never Tell You

  • 11 years ago

    by Jacob

    I really enjoyed this poem. It had a very nice flow, and was packed with emtion. Great job. 5/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Wow, this was so full of emotion and hatred. I loved it. It was amazing and it showed your talent. Keep your head up my Dear. 5/5 =]]

    -Jenna.

  • 11 years ago

    by Lovely Bones

    Amazing. The words packed a powerful punch. You have a very good way of expressing yourself.. may God help you get rid of the anger and the pain.

    God Bless,
    Sarah-Joy

  • 11 years ago

    by BlueDreams

    Oh my, dear, such a beautiful sad penned you potray here, so breathtaking write, yet beautiful emotions....... whatever, i wish everything will fine soon, take care,...bert ~

  • 11 years ago

    by Lu

    Sherry-Lynn,
    My heart aches for you deary, the physical and emotional pain you have gone through is just terrible .
    I know God says we must forgive, but how do we bring ourselves to forgive something as what you have gone through . The only thing I could do "if I were you that is" is to put my trust in God . I am no 'Holy Lady' by any means but I have gone through some pretty difficult things in my lifetime . And I can only say from my experience is " that God has always been there for me in times of need"

    I hope you find the peace you so rightfully deserve Sherry-Lynn .

    I am just a mess of tears now, this piece has truly touched my heart .

    Take care, Sherry-Lynn

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    So much hurt and pain thru out this whole poem. oh gee. wish this never happened to anyone. so sad to hear it does. i know it does.

    5/5 David

  • 10 years ago

    by matthew

    One truly emotional poem, one that puts your mind in where you were, good writing, deserves a top 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Boy

    You have put here great thoguhts. i like the longing ofwords. how you attach words wiht another stanza words. its an art. you have talent.
    takecare 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Rasheed Khokhar

    This is very very heartfelt feeling.

    Whats a fantasic write....:) 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    My heat aches for you and im so glad you are not in this situation anymore. no one deserves that. I loved it, it was so moving and powerful. a great read
    xx
    Taegan Emily

  • 9 years ago

    by TwistedAngel xx

    Beautiful poem
    sorry for ur sadness
    xx

  • 9 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    No longer yearning your touch
    Searching hysterically for a hideaway
    `This gave me one of the most powerful images I've ever imagined from poetry -- the use of "hysterical" made the words so much more potent. I could just feel the emotion.

    The biggest secret that I have hid
    Shocking it appears to be
    Is praying nightly for your death
    Violent and brutal may it be
    `Oh, hauntingly beautiful ending. I've never seen one like it and I respect you dearly for writing these words. Many of my friends get abused and they won't accept hate -- just the pain and the sadness. They wont come straight out and say how they really feel inside because they're so afraid. Thank you, because this gives me hope that one day, they will finally leave and be able to stand up for themselves.

    Now on the typical stuff that I critique people on, the flow was rocky, and the length of stanzas alternated flimsly for me, but despite that, your choice of vocabulary was gripping. It started out subtle, and just burst into climax with a explosion of beautifully picked words.

    Well done.
    ..__MiNDYY