Comments : A Forbidden Love .

  • 11 years ago

    by Rheingold

    Wow, you get a 5 from me just for having the same first name as someone who I used to like, and it wouldn't surprise me if she wrote this poem.

    My, how I imagined her thinking that (this poem) about me. Shame I never had the guts to go after her, she was almost too good of a girl.

    Memories.

    Keep up the great work!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Great! and this is really true.. amazing i love the story i hope a lot of readers can relate. great emotion keep it up5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Misstress

    This a very well written piece.
    It flowed so well,for sure a lot of people can relate to this one..

    If Im in the situation I will for Love regardless of what ever happens to me.
    and I did once, but fate blocks the way, at least I have try.

  • 11 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wowee-- I must say this was ALOT better then I had expected. Your flow was very smooth, and I loved the words you chose for your rhyme scheme.

    The emotions & meaning behind this were very strong. You wrote it amazingly. Keep up the great work! 5/5

    Natalie``

  • 11 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Nice job. Great emotion. Your flow was also consistant. That's good. It's a beautiful poem even though it's a bit long for my taste.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kalgalath

    Whoa. that is like...i dont know. i cant even say what im feeling from that.

  • 11 years ago

    by x.Athame.x

    Very nice. Flowing, and eloquent, with much meaning. If you could be so kind, as to glance at mine, t'would be much appreciated. But anyway, very nice. 5/5

    Kind Regards,
    Luna

  • 11 years ago

    by Just That Girl

    I absluetlyy looved it.. it's defintly one of my favorite poems.. you discribed the scean so perfectly that i have a mental image burned in my brain..!

    I loved your choice of words.. your rhyming was fantastic.. so origanle.. not like some poems that have a forced rhyming!

    It was filled with emotions.. tons of them.. i could feel each feeling of hers as if they were my own.. it came straight from your heart..

    take care...
    luv,,
    haya 3gab =]

  • 11 years ago

    by Bret Higgins

    It's been written with careful consideration, but it's really too long. You could say everything you need to express in less than half of the verses.

    That said, I managed to finish it without getting bored so that says something about your writing style.

    Keep it up, but remember that less is sometimes more.

    Bret

  • 11 years ago

    by Laurie Tran

    WHOO!! GO MINDY!!! I TOLD YOU YOU WERE A BETTER POET!! yet you didnt believe me! hhaha

    CONGRADULATIONS!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by Live, Laugh, Love

    For being 13 this poem is really good. You said you were rusty but the truth is your really good. It's sad but true. Plenty of kids go through this. Great write.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kimmaly

    *Claping* Wonderful......speechless......wonderful piece.
    -Kimmaly

  • 11 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    I loved the little introduction! Really original. =)
    The poem its self was great. Tells such a interesting storey and kept great flow.
    I adored the ending [These are the secrets,
    Hidden behind a forbidden love.] Such a great ending I thought. Really finished it off for me.
    Well done. =)

  • 11 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow! im speechless!! good job 5/5!!!
    I rly like this one its rly rly good 5/5 keep up the good work!

  • 11 years ago

    by Katie

    ~ ~ i really liked this poem, its really strong. ~ ~

  • 11 years ago

    by Just a pretty picture

    Its an awesome poem i like it

  • 11 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Wow! I loved this, the flow was perfect and even though it was long it kept my attention. Excellent job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Letty

    I must say that when I first decided to read and comment on this poem, I thought that it would be similar to most of the love poems that I have already read. But it's not, it's really quit unique. I loved the flow of it, the emotion that was put into it and I loved the hold imagery of it and the concept . This was a amazing poem. I'm looking forward to reading more of your poems. Keep up the good work. 5/5

    Letty

  • 11 years ago

    by Sammie Jo

    Hey, I love this Poem it's awesome, and so sweet. Sam

  • 11 years ago

    by Andi

    I LOVED IT!!! ur so talented 4 how young u r....i wish i'd been able 2 write so well at that age.....thx 4 the comment....i always appreciate them! def keep up the good work
    andi