Comments : My Worse Fear.

  • 10 years ago

    by Milton

    It's lonley and sad. hope you're not feeling this way. I liked it, I see how hard everything can feel. good stuff :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Angelmom

    That is a great poem. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Well written , contains deep emotions . While reading it, I thoght there were a couple of grammatical errors, but idk .maybe it`s just me . Good poem tho (:
    ..ღ__MiNDYY

  • 10 years ago

    by Natalie

    And now I can't say on my two feet.

    [I think you meant "stay" ..not say. I could be wrong though.. ]

    Maybe sometimes I got to give in.

    [This line would work alot better if you replaced "got" with "have"]

    This pain stays, and feels like dirt.

    [To be honest, I didn't really like this line... Using "dirt' felt forced.]

    Overall, it was a very sad poem. & I hope you're not going through something like this. I liked the ending alot too, It brought the poem together with a great intense clash. Great job!

    Natalie``

  • 10 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    It was a good poem. I think that some of your wording didn't quite fit it in or have as powerful an effect as you would have liked, but overall it was well done and you could definitely feel the emotion in your poem. Nice job! Jpoet*

  • 10 years ago

    by X2892

    WOW ur poem was so excellent, i give it a 5/5, keep on doing a good job

  • 10 years ago

    by Tammie

    Aw, such a sad poem. It's hard when friends are there to help you when they should be. I know the feeling well, its terrible. You wrote this poem with pure emotion, and i can feel it while i was reading it. A great poem overall. =] 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Kyra

    Such a sad poem but a great read, I liked the emotion in it.
    ~Kyra~

  • 10 years ago

    by Britta007

    That was so sad i hope ur not really going though that but it was a great poem!!!
    xoxo

  • 10 years ago

    by Sophie

    Really sad poem. i hope it isn't true, if it is then just be strong and keep ur chin up. overall great write. good work.

    sophie:)

    ps. wuld love ur opinion on a few of mine

  • 10 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Wow this was have a great flow.. too much emotin its deeply touch my heart wonderful job5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by awww

    Wonderful write... expressed yourself so good... i can feel the emotion and loneliness... my heart feels the need of a savior or at least a true friend... loved this poem so much... keep writing!

    ~angel~

  • 10 years ago

    by Failed Attempt

    Great structure and emotive words..
    i rallt like it
    keep writing ur gifted

  • 10 years ago

    by robin milford

    5/5 great work keep writing

  • 10 years ago

    by kelS;

    I thought this poem was really goodd. the words were really good and its easy to relate to.. your really good at writing poems you can relate to good job! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Aww hunny. This poem sounds like you need a friend, but you don't want to let your other one(s) go. =( I'll be here if you ever need to talk.

    The poem...It was very sentimental, moving and touching again. It reminds me of just last year and the fights and stuff that was happening. I got through it and so will you. =) There was good flow in most parts, but some parts could be better.

    The title should be: [My Worst Fear]. You just had it in the wrong tense. =P

    [Forgive me for I know {I} failed.]
    Correction:{I've}

    [Who knew I {drug} all these years.]
    Correction: {drugged}

    Just a few minor corrections I noticed. =) Keep 'em coming! 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 10 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Beautiful poem. Very moving, and gripping. I love your precise sense of wording, they are so strikingly sad...you ended it so good too! Wonderful work, keep it up!

  • 10 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    This wasnt so good as the last but still made me feel the same feeling 'cept not so strong.

    A good job
    4/5
    I hope you'll never quit this gift.
    ~Emma

  • 10 years ago

    by Ayla

    Amazing

  • 10 years ago

    by ~*love me not*~

    I loved it!!!!! Who cares if people think you had "grammer errors"!!! I understood it and it touched me!!!!!
    ~*love me not*~