Snow Children!

This was a very nice piece a good one in flow and description and clear in message but well done over all I loved your description in this pice very good Plot121

Amazing poem, you truly have a talent, keep up the superb work, you're doing. Check out some of my poems when you have the time.

Best Wishes
Wallace

A very different over all idea for a poem. Althought nature does inspire us, many poets find it hard to portray somthing so amazing in words. You however, did a splendid job. The syllable counts however weren't very good. Something I like to do is give a copy of my poem to somone else to read, while they read I take careful note as to wear they seem to stumble over words, pause for long amounts of time, or speed up to make the beat keep going. Those places where the person who is reading your poem does that, are usualy where the sllyable counts, or simply how the words sound together is off. I loved the unique discriptions you used throughout your poem, although in a few places the words were a bit cliche.

Evergreen trees are covered with there white sprinkles we call snow.
The cold white sheet of snow covers the ground,
Delicate footprints encrusted at the footpath
Leading towards the destination of peoples homes...
^^^ The opening line to your poem seems to go on for to long, and in the first line "there" should be "their".... I loved how you said that the footprints were encrusted...A very different and disscriptive way to say it. Over all a nice read 5/5 Keep up the effort on poems like these...l know how hard they are

I like it!

I rele liked the words u used ... and also the idea of the poem...its great .. keep it up