Comments : All I want for christmas

  • 11 years ago

    by melly xx

    Aww, this poem is so extremely sad, and i really hope it's not true. if so, you will be in my prayers tonight.
    "that their is just no way"
    you used the wrong "their", the "their" you used is possesive, and theres nothing possesive here, use this "their" instead: there
    "if she saw my 5th birthday"
    you should change that to say, "if she lived to see my 5th birthday" it would make more sense...anyways great job sweety, rhyming didn't seem forced at all, 5;5
    god bless

  • 11 years ago

    by Pain Remains

    Beautiful yet sad poem. If it's true, i can only say i'm sorry. Stay strong and keep up the good work.
    Jade

  • 11 years ago

    by WitherBlisterBurnandPeel

    A truly powerful poem.
    Keep up the good work!

  • This poemis amazing, but so sad. I know how you feel the same thign happened with my grandma only not on christmas. i know its not the same as losing a parent, but i somewhat know how you feel

  • 11 years ago

    by Bianca

    That's sad. but its really good

  • 11 years ago

    by SECRET

    Even tho ur dis poem is a sad one--but it's good---i'msooo jolous---\

    memores stays with us--where ever we go--even tho it's sad ones

  • 11 years ago

    by Miss Pipp

    That poem is just amazing. Like the rest of them.. I love your work it is completly consuming. It's impossible to look away from your work. *tears* it was so sad and sweet. Keep writing. =]

    Pip xxx

  • 11 years ago

    by Roses and lilys

    Oh this is such a sad poem. I really hope that it isn't true. I loved this poem. It was like I was there. Another 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Elisa

    Im sorry baby. my great grandma died two days before christmas and no one told me about it for almost a year. i know how it feels to loose someone close to you. and im very sorry for your lose. people say that its easiest to write poetry about things that mean the most to you. (good or bad) and i guess your mom is something that is easy tp write about. even though it hurts...

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Oh wow...I'm crying.
    This really hit home hard as I'm going through something similar.
    I loved this poem, it really hit me where the heart is.
    A wonderful piece on such a sad subject.

  • 10 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Omg.... just.. omg.

    That is too sad. wayyyy too sad. god, that was so emotional. . . . .

    If a poem can make me feel liek this, then it's gotta be brilliant. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Im In Love What Can I Say

    O.m.g that is so sad...im sorry for what happened... i hope you move on and just because she has passed away doesnt mean that she is not there she will always be watching you and always be in your heart. great poem 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Landi Cordier

    Its beautifull! wow

    Narc xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    Oh gee. this is so so sad. it is a brilliant story. i thought the ending was going to be like that.

    i loved it. my present would be one more day with her.

    another 5. beautiful. all i can say is stunning!

    david

  • 10 years ago

    by Darien

    Aww, that was a sad one man. You definitely have a very pure heart, and that can be a very dangerous thing. I can tell you that from experience. We feel love and pain at a higher level than other people. I'm sure you know what I mean..

  • 10 years ago

    by sunni

    OMG!! aah >< this is such a sad poe m:'( it actually made me cry .5/5 for SURE..one of the poems ive ever read in my whoole entire life.

    reeli hope it isnt true >

  • 10 years ago

    by Miae

    This is such a nice poem, it really is. 5/5. I cant get over how much you wanted to make me to cry from this, very, very nice work.

  • 10 years ago

    by Reemz

    Fxin gorgeous so gorgeous im fxin cryingggg

  • 10 years ago

    by XxAllia RaynexX

    This is a beautiful poem. It is extremely sad. I'm really sorry if this happened to you. I'm sure it's hard to get over somthing like this.

    ~Allia

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  • 10 years ago

    by Cassie Cain

    Good poem