I am glad after seeing your discussions several times that I finally compelled to read some of your work.
This piece was very nice. I enjoyed it and am glad the door was opened to allow me to read it. Great job and very expressive in relaying the message you were trying to get across.
The rythm scheme was off abit but the message was right in your face. I liked how you boldly expressed your distain for the other person it was well writen in that manner. All and all it was good I would have rythmed it abit more to keep the flow going but it was a good read. ok this is the 5th poem and now I will e-mail you with my over view hope you can take it. Plot121
I really enjoyed this...very moving and intense, flow was good for the most part but there were times when I thought it was a little off.
Again, I loved the ending, it hits the reader hard.
I thought this was beautifully written, it really tugs on ther reader's heart.