This poem is really nicely done, I would like to leave some criticism to help you out, but I honestly believe this poem is perfect the way it is. the last 4 lines are really special they make this poem no doubt 5/5 great work

Excellent! I love flow in this poem and the imagery was great! I'm sorry but I don't have any suggestions to improve this poem, cos it's fine the way it is =P
Great job! Keep it up!
5/5

Sad but beautifully penned. Nice job, especially the ending!

This poem is awesome. You have really done an excellent job on this and should be very proud! The flow is great the wording everything! 5/5

I like this poem a lot!!!!!!! it's reallly good. but in this stanza... When smiling came, so naturally,
And happiness, so easily.

i dont think there is supposed to be a comma before the 'so naturally'. but i could be wrong......

anywhoooo. great job.

Very nicely written. I loved it. The emotion within was great. The flow as well as the structure was good. Keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Wow, may i ask what made you break?

its a real good poem, i love how you described it, it has a perfect rhyme, but it doesnt seem that you forced it, Becca, you never cease to amaze me! well done!

Narc xxx

Very nicely penned. The emotion was really great in this. Interesting form. Now and again it didn't really flow as well as it could have done, but overall I really enjoyed it.

Your rhythm was smooth up until this line:
I ran away, from pain and tears,
To watch as my blood clears.

it didn't exactly flow too well, but other than that line, it's great [: 5/5

I like this, i think that the ending is strong, that was my favorite part. Keep it up.

Tammie

* wauw.. you know, this poem really has something behind it you know. That when after you've been depressed, you still carry everything with you, also for the rest of your life. nice.

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"I ran away, from pain and tears,
To watch as my bloody eyes cleared."

I think bloody kind of threw that line off a bit but it still works okay.
This piece is something which i think a lot of people (unfortunatly) can relate to. The world would be a better place if depression didn't exist.
5/5
*Gem*