Comments : Forest of Dark

  • 10 years ago

    by SEAN

    I enjoyed the format of this the majority of stanzas deal with very oppresive descriptions and then the clarity the escape towards the end
    cleverly written well done

  • 10 years ago

    by Beauty In The Breaking

    This was great and I definitely relate to it.

    Thanks for all the comments and votes ^.^
    now I'm going to have fun going through and returning the favor. =)

    By the way, scary as it is, I understand your profile perfectly ~.~

  • 10 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    Oh my, that is amazing! and your only 11? wow, think how good you'll be in a few years? it's just... amzing, 5/5!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Deana

    Mysterious and haunting great job,I think I had that same dream before scary !

  • 10 years ago

    by Chelsea

    Thanks you are a good poet too keep it up!
    -chelsea

  • 10 years ago

    by icarus

    If I find the way out, I can be peacefully

    I think it should be peaceful not peacefully.
    Loved the first stanza.

  • 10 years ago

    by icarus

    I enjoyed the poem over all. First and second stanzas were probably my favorite.
    ps I like your profile. Mash, good show.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sydney

    I like this one. Its good.

    ~Sid~

  • 10 years ago

    by Hey Brittknee

    Amazing poem

    brittany (MD)

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Very creative words and well orginized, this is a 5/5 poem as you really did a great job....... at the beggining you just captured all of your readers attention and you ended it greatly,

    keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Huanting poem, draws your attention, great great great ,
    ness

  • 10 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Leaving a dent; in my mind. = emit the semi-colon

    the lights growing = the light's growing fast

    help, but = emit the comma

    end; of = emit the semi-colon

    light, enter my mind = emit the comma

    Sigh, did you do the comma's and semicolon's on purpose? They were in fact pretty annoying. I didn't really enjoy this poem that much. It didn't have any flow... no rhythm... nothing that interesting. A slight uniqueness but... that's pretty much it. Not the best poem I've read, but nonetheless a 5/5.

    Well done,
    5/5
    ~Stephen White