This was such a joy to read! Finally something different! I really liked the descriptions you used in this poem, and I really liked how it turned into a romantic sort of poem. As writers, we sometimes get these crazy urges to write something different, whatever comes to our mind. I wanted to write a romantic love poem about an elf and wizard! Lol, maybe I can use this poem as motivation. Really nice work!

"pigeon's eye view" that is a little sketchy...

"ash wings" could possible look better as : "ashened wings" ?

"titbit" i am unfamiliar with this word. Is it tidbit?

"a flattered flutter " i love that!

Wow. I love the whole metaphor thing... if only i could write like this....
It is just beautiful... it just sings to me. Incredible poem!

20/5
~Stephen White

Wow. Lol, I did not understand anythinggg. Haha. It must be good if I couldn't understand the metaphorss. Well, I can say that the flow worked well and you used nice vocabulary and descriptions. Nice job hunni, sorry I couldn't be more helpful. 5/5

Could you please do ::

`Battling The Heartache

Haha. welll....i dont think i grasped that completely, but as far as i did I LOVE IT. I enjoyed it even for the very vague non metphoric reasons. Your mind is crazy abstract. Lucky you, I wish I was more abstract. Writing would be somewhat easier. I'd never be at loss for words.

I'm off to read more.

I liked ti I didn't get the stanzas but oh well it's not my poem..I thought the imagery and words were amazing!

That was interesting no rilly it was lol good 1

Good job

Good job

Great work, wasnt too bad could have some changes, but i love your creativity you used, good job.

It's a quite "interesting" poem, and It's a little hard to follow... but I still like it.