Killed me With a Fantasy

by IdTakeABulletForYou   Mar 28, 2007


Killed me with a fantasy
That clearly wouldn't ever be.
Devoured in a fuzzy dream;
So false, the truth I should've seen.

I break apart with every word.
Divert your eyes so YOU aren't hurt.
Don't care for me, I will be fine...
(There goes my "Once upon a time...")

It feels like water consumes me,
Like I am sinking in the sea.
I send no flares, I don't scream loud.
I'm doomed-- I know I'm going down.

[You held my hand] (You let it go)
[You promised me](Each promise: Broke)
[You said you loved me](Now, you don't.)
[You said you'd hold me](Now you won't.)

I'm losing air, it's hard to breathe;
The water's creeping up on me.
Each breath I take may be my last...
(I'm going down... I'm sinking fast.)

I thought that you would care for me,
But now it is so clear
You never even loved me,
You just broke my heart and left me here.

I'm sure I'm gonna sink below
-- there's nothing I can do.
I'm running out of oxygen...
(It's all because of you.)

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  • 16 years ago

    by Just Sierra

    You're my hero, senor. =]
    beautifully executed. I'm in awe!

  • 16 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    The most beautiful heartbreaking poem I've read in a long time.

  • 16 years ago

    by XxBrokenInsidexX

    This is the BEST poem ever to me!
    i love it
    great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by unblue skye

    Wow!!!! thats.... an amazing poem! my fav part wuz this:
    I'm losing air, it's hard to breathe;
    The water's creeping up on me.
    Each breath I take may be my last...
    (I'm going down... I'm sinking fast.)

    idk why but ya...o.o a poem like this should beh published in a book 1 day...n.n great job!!! keep it up and im putting this in meh favs!!! once again, great job!!!
    ~*~Skye~*~

  • 16 years ago

    by Tormented

    I break apart with every word.
    Divert your eyes so YOU aren't hurt.
    Don't care for me, I will be fine...
    (There goes my "Once upon a time...")

    ^bloody Awesome stanza!
    Awesome Poem!
    Loved it!
    Nice flow
    Nice Vocab
    One of the best i've read so far!
    Really,Awesome poem
    Great work
    Keep it up

    Keep Smiling.