"To have and to hold and in her i do confide"
[To have and to hold, in her I do confide]
- And just drags the line out too much. It's better if you take it out and replace it with a comma. Gives it a lingering feeling instead of dragging it out.
"all my heart,mind and soul"
[all my heart, mind, and soul]
- I always say that if you're going to use commas in the lines then use them correctly. It's a group/list of things which is in calls for commas.
The poem made me smile. Not at your pain but the fact that you're strong enough to do your job without family and friends, no matter how much it hurts to be away from them. Kudos for that, darling. Lots of kudos.