Yes this was one of your better poems, Good story as well as a good topic, nice structure and rhyming and you did stay on track while rhyming so thats a pluss..
It was also a very interesting thing to end the poem with that question...
One negative thing to me was that it could have been a bit longer but thats just me
I love it. What really gets to me is that there are kids out there in the world without anyone who'll give a care about them. I knwo this may be really corny and all, but I hope that one day there will be a way to help them in their times of neediness.
*Tear* This poem is incredible!! The ryhming was superior and I loved it completely. I don't know what to say. You are a gifted poet and I look forward to reading other poems of yours. The first part was my favorite though, and the ending complemented it. Brilliant piece of work, 5/5!
I might have some poems that interest you, so if you want, could you R/R/C on a couple of my poems?? You don't have to if you don't want to though.