Comments : The Little Boy

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    How very sad. This poem has a good flow and rhyme scheme...well written...keep writing! 5/5 Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by malina

    Omg...you write such great powerful poems..

  • 10 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Excellent. well written. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Rattlehead

    Nice poems your a really good poet nice work.

  • 10 years ago

    by edward molinar

    Wow.. a well written poem indeed.. keep up the gud work!

  • 10 years ago

    by 19Rusty

    Excellent poem. You can really see a boy in this situation.

  • 10 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Wow that was very sad and touching. It had a great flow. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by An Act Of Depression

    Wow.
    I Really Liked It.
    Very Deep And Sad.
    One Of The Best Poems I Have Ever Seen.
    Good Job! Keep It Up =]

  • 10 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    "A poor lost soul, stranded on the streets
    Tired and exhausted with nothing to eat"

    The starting of a very good write. Captured the reader with the wonderful flow and sad message.

    "All the pain and torture he kept within
    Now you tell me, what kind of world do we live in? "

    A very good question. Sometimes, people get so wrapped up in theirselves, they don't see what is in front of them.

    A very emotional write, that is done from someone who's depth of understanding out numbers his years. Thought provoking.

    Well done.
    Jeannie

  • 10 years ago

    by June

    That sent a shiver right through me ,it was so well written ,your really have a great talent for writting ,please do keep it up as I will be looking forward to future writes.

  • 10 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Poor kid. :| I love your poem.. I felt the boy's misery.. 5/5!

  • 10 years ago

    by RainbowSlider

    I really liked your poem. It is hard to remain positive when faced with a negative reality. As a caregiver this poem really touched me.

  • 10 years ago

    by your letting me die baby

    This poem is really good I love it its one of the best I ever read

    p.s thanks for commenting mine

  • 10 years ago

    by Perfection

    Yes this was one of your better poems, Good story as well as a good topic, nice structure and rhyming and you did stay on track while rhyming so thats a pluss..
    It was also a very interesting thing to end the poem with that question...
    One negative thing to me was that it could have been a bit longer but thats just me

    Overall Great Job Wallace =)

  • 10 years ago

    by Mary Howe

    That gave me chills and brought tears to my eyes good stuff i'll be looking for more

  • 10 years ago

    by Katt Baker

    I love it. What really gets to me is that there are kids out there in the world without anyone who'll give a care about them. I knwo this may be really corny and all, but I hope that one day there will be a way to help them in their times of neediness.

    Love it,
    Katt

  • 10 years ago

    by Jezzika

    WOW!!! I love it... it's an amazing piece of work! You did a amazing job... the flow was great and everything just fit so nicely... 5/5 all the way!!

    Much love and the best of wishes!
    @!Jezzika!@

  • 10 years ago

    by Civil Hatori

    *Tear* This poem is incredible!! The ryhming was superior and I loved it completely. I don't know what to say. You are a gifted poet and I look forward to reading other poems of yours. The first part was my favorite though, and the ending complemented it. Brilliant piece of work, 5/5!

    I might have some poems that interest you, so if you want, could you R/R/C on a couple of my poems?? You don't have to if you don't want to though.

    Thanks, Hatori.
    hatecanneverheal

  • 10 years ago

    by blissfully emo

    Awesome poem! so full of emotion and bringing to focus one of society's many faults. keep writin'. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Corruption

    Wow awesome job i liked this one more then the wind one i found this one addressed life problems more and i respect anything like that so this is wonderful awesome job and thx again for the comments

    keenan