What a dark poem...amnd rather unique! i was captivated within your words! inspiring! great write!! and good choice of words!
kirsty
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Hmm, interestingly, this poem is about Outer Body Experiences.

A truly incredible piece of poetry! The words seemed to float off the pages and I was able to take in all of your imagery. The words worked really well together, and I particularly liked this stanza:

Diving deep with aims to soar,
perhaps a journey far too far.
It's coming up from down's the trouble.
I'm too long from the surface.

I don't know why, but I enjoyed that part the most.
Keep it up, and I wouldn't change anything ^_^ 5/5

Hatori
<Lonely dreams>

P.S. If you get a chance, could you please RRC one of my poems? Thanks ^.-