I really love your work, your words are so powerful. This one was great, the reption was strong, and the emtion was deep. the sudden chage was in fact thrilling, amazingly well done.5/5

Very beautifl....excellent choice of words...deep n very very powerful...very dark yet nicely expressed!
5/5 easy!=)
xxPoojaxx

Your writing is amazing, and the words are just perfect. i love the way it had so much power and was deep. i give you a 5/5 and i am happy i added you to my fave's

Great choice of words and descrptions. Nice work : ] Keep it up!

The imagery was great.. I can really see the pictures in my mind. Amazing. Flow was good, well done.

5/5 as always!

Great poem at first i didnt see how it was going to fit into the ''dark'' section but i guess the ending made it fit lol good job and thx for your comment

keenan:):)

I stepped on the fresh, green grass,
feeling
the warmth of the breeze on my skin.
The sun was at its zenith,
And the ground was sizzling.

Beautiful descriptions with awesome words and the structure is well managed. Keep up the great work. tc