Oh wow...this is...I don't know how to explain it in words, but it just draws me in and leaves that wonderful I don't know, tinkling-ish or something like that good feeling...simply beautiful. :) kudos
Grr... i hate you. You write well. Lol. Okay, i know you hate one liners but i honestly dont know what to say except you are very talented and this poem was truely exceptional. I mean it. I loved your vocabulary and the sophisticated way you arranged the words to make a true meaning out of them. This is a true piece of art and you are worthy of a 5/5 :)
"You tried to catch my smile,
as if it were attainable,"
Those lines really spoke to me, because they hold such a truth within them . I was reading this just yesturday but never bothered to comment XD I like how you ended it . It was sweet in a totally different way . It`s saying the same thing other poems say, only better and it was just so ... well written . I don`t have anything negative to say .
This is really sweet, your poems are extremely different from other people's, but while others try to fit their poems to certain rules and guidelines, you just tell it as it is. and your poems are so beautiful like that, because they are so true, and full of feeling, 5/5
i could say more, but then this would go on forevor so