Comments : Bad Dreams...

  • 11 years ago

    by Gem

    "Body losing it's love and warmth.
    What am I to do?
    Your leaving me so cold and blue."

    I loved the way you compared love to warmth and then brought the coldeness in as the loss. It was excellently done
    5/5 m'dear

  • 11 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    This one is beautiful...well expressed...n u've put in beuty thru' simple choice of words...which gives the poem a powerful lopk...great work!
    n i think "Your leaving me so cold n blue"is a good line...but i think it'll look better with "you're"..*just a thought..very good dark poetry..
    Kp writing!

  • 11 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Good poem, wit honest emotions. You captured a image of a moment that lot of people went through. 5/5 Keep writing!

  • 11 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Hey! Thanks for the comment. Just pointing out some things

    Body losing 'it's' ('its') love and warmth.

    'Your' ('You're') leaving me so cold and blue.

    Other than that, I think you are good.

    The poem was sad. I know what it's like to feel used when you are the one loving them... Good job!


  • 11 years ago

    by casanova

    Its really i loved it
    felt the emotion in it

  • 11 years ago

    by repair her heart

    Im relating to this so much right totally sucks....the poem was simple but at the same time blows you away with each syllable

  • 11 years ago

    by amandalynn

    I love it. it's realli good.
    5/5 all the wayy.
    <3 manda.

  • 11 years ago

    by Katie

    Ooo, I really like this one. A lot of great vocabulary. Good job. :]

  • 11 years ago

    by xfAdInGxaWaYx

    Really good. I can really relate to it at the moment. Thanks for the comment on my poem. Keep up the great writing!

  • 11 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow. this is really good, it was sad though, but it really puts this image in my head as i read it. thx for the comment, your poems really are amazing

  • 10 years ago

    by Sole

    Interesting format, but a well constructed message. I think the non-rhyming is a good idea because it enhances the randomness of the poem, which is effectively the same as a dream. Nice.

    Sole. x