Comments : Invisible Boundaries and Electric Fences

  • 10 years ago

    by repair her heart

    Wow this poem was short and yet explained oh so well the topic. this poem sets itself aside from the rest of them.........you do a extroardinary job with adjectives when you write a poem

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    Well this was an excellent poem. the description and emotinoal thru out this whole poem was fantastic. well done and keep writing.

    5/5 David

  • 10 years ago

    by Sourav

    Short and powerful poem. Liked the writing style.

  • 10 years ago

    by ~â‚£ading |nspiration~

    First thing that attracted me to see this poem would be the title, interesting subject u got there...well, I muz say...so is ur poems...u use a rather indirect way to tell something, which I find it hard to do so myself, good effort...well done..

  • 10 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Well first of all I must tell you that I am sure you did not write this poem for it to be taken this way so I must explain what and why it reminds me of what it does.
    Second, You have done an outstanding job with this and I felt so drawn into and couldn't wait to read the next line. Awesome.
    As for the my analysis of this poem and what it reminded me of...... this is it.

    I live in Georgia and back in July of 1994 we had a really huge storm ( actually a squall from an tropical depression ) it loomed over the midstate for days causing flooding to numerous areas. It was fourth of July and the interstate was gridlocked with traffic.

    **Gray clouds looming overhead.
    (The storm that wouldn't go away for days with constant rainfall)

    **Decay and misery rising up from the ground,
    (Reminds me of the cemetary it flooded (RoseHill) and there were so many caskets just floating down the river which the cemetary is located beside)

    **that once gave life to smiles. (The people buried at the cemetary that once gave us all smiles in life)

    **Painful screams echoing in the breeze. (People literally trapped in their cars and being washed away in creeks)

    **The once cheerful sun burning flesh. ( like I said it was 4th of July and that is usually a big time at the lake and now it was still a big time at the lake but searching for people and rescuing them)

    **Tainted water abundant during drought, (The city of Macon had no water during because of the flooding of the Water Maintenance depot) Among all the water from the flood we only had water that was tainted.

    I hope you don't mind my own analogy of the poem. It was a great write and as I stated that I know it probably had nothing to do with that but it sure fit the subject very well. Kudos.

    Dixie

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Truly dark, truly twisted. and truly amazing.
    I love this. The words screamed at me, brillant by the way, flowed like water, emtions strong, and deep. perfectly penned. amazing job well done. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    Omg.. so sad but yet so powerful.. well spoken, the flow was really good, I was able to see the image.. honestly I wish I could give you more.. but its already perfect .. its really good so anyway good job and keep up the good work.. srry it took me awhile to comment ur poem..

  • 10 years ago

    by Gary Jurechka

    Wow- This poem is full of such fantastic images and such powerful emotions! It carries a deepness, a sense of futility. I love the ending. Excellent piece!

    Peace, Poetry & Power,

    Gary Jurechka

  • 10 years ago

    by mohamad aref numan

    Very well written

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, this piece is breath- taking. I can relate to it, and I like it from the beginning to the end. every stanza is greatly written, and the whole poem has superb wording.
    I like the repetition of the first line in every stanza, it adds powerful effect to the piece.
    Well done, 5/5 from me.

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    WOW, that was a wonderful
    peice
    i loved the descrption
    and it had so much imagery

    5/5 well deserved

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Excellently written poem. I like wording very much. Every stanza is incredible.
    Well done 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    I know that I am already comment this one but I must say WOW!!! Powerful rhythm and the ending is... very emotional. You should be proud on your self! You are very talented.

  • 10 years ago

    by NearlyCrazy6

    Wow!
    I love it
    so emotional!
    great job