Great poem full of pain and emotions flow was good and wording great , all in all you did a great job keep it up , your friend Tracy dean ~5/5~

Good job keep it up i liked it :)~melissaraye~

Wow. Its so deep and painful, you can feel what you are tryig to say. The undercurrent of emotion sweeps you off your feet as you read it. A masterpeice.
5/5
take care
-Black night-

Whoa

i like the poem , the best part of the poem begins at "the pout to her lips" and ends at while the other stays" the rest is good but that is the best part of the poem =)

I totally loved and relate to this one =P I don't know why love has to hurt so much =( I've been in this mess and still am but no one ever really seems to see pain in someone elses eyes =(
A truly fantastic job at capturing the emotion and pain behind this that make the reader actually feel it themselfs =) 5/5 ^_^
Rhea

Great poem keep it up 5/5