Haha. i loved that. the energy and happiness of the poem really rubbed off onto me.

this style is new, well to me it is. where did you find this style?

great job. 5/5.

I think it is wonderful that you try new things. I really like this style, and the postive energy that came fronm it. Really well written, only thing that I thought you should add, it a note at the bottom describing this style of poety, since most people aren't going to understand it. other than that is is perfect, and I see no room for improvement.

Aww lovely description ib this my darling
good write
xoxoxo

I love this poem - the format, and the way it perfectly captures most parties.
~Claire

Hahahaha, isnt parties make you to forget whatever is going on in our daily life.
this was another great write by you.keep it up

That's a pretty neat style of poetry. It's really differnent. 5/5
Ravyn

Hm.
Interesting.
I never liked Tyburns, but your's isn't bad at all.
Very creative.
A little random; noncliche. Haha. Good. =]

I didn't enjoy the topic, but I liked that you did try and .. I'm not sure how to explain it. It's good, though.

Let's see.
One complaint.
"Little kids chasing running, hiding anywhere.
Grownups talking drinking, smiling for hours."
[[How about punctuation:
"Little kids chasing{,} running, hidding anywhere.
Grownups talking{,} drinking{;} smiling for hours."

=] Nicely done.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 5.5

Hey,
nice tyburn, only one thing is wrong, the last two lines should be 9 syllables, but when I was counting the syllables and there are 11 instead of 9, so if you could change that, then it perfect, still i will give you 5/5,
kisses stephanie

Itis good. i have never heard this kind of poem before. some of the lines were not 9 syllables. some were ten

Nice form of poetry never seen it before.

Hi
very nice and beautiful poem 5/5 .
and i'll appreciate your vote and comment for my poems
hani