Ohhh wow that was simply amazing. I really really loved this so full of anger and hate, well written, powerful, great flow, word choice is excellent, there is no way to improve on perfection. I really like this it is effin powerful, and it deserves more thatn 5/5
Wow, that was amazing and full of emotion, made me actually tear up, really good and really strong writing. I thought it was great, and it was really nice reading someones poem who had good grammer and stuff, it was so easy to understand and read. It flowed and was good rhyming. Really enjoyable to read.
So much anger,hate, and frustration brought out into this poem.
I can't even imagine what you must feel like.
I'm so sorry.
I too do not have a real dad.
My dad passed when I was only 3.
So I guess I can somewhat relate.
You did a wonderful job
A good poem. You have applied language and some poetic tools throughout this piece in a distinct manner, although I would agree with your statement above the poem:
'I wrote it more out of anger than anything'â€¦
â€¦which is fine, although there is room for improvement.
The use of repetition works well in particular cases, however, the poem tends to lose its effect once you start using the term 'dad' endlessly. Now, I don't blame you, nor the poem- I mean the poem is concerning a 'dad', but you could try and balance the piece up with alternatives such as 'father' or 'parent'. Now, I know this may disturb the rhyme you have going on; but even in a poem where a rhyming scheme is the integral part, it isn't necessary to have it in every stanza. It just seems a little forced that way, if you get my meaning.
Other than that, a well written poem. Well done :)
I liked this poem alot I can myself relate to this in more ways then one. I liked the repetition throughout this, although I found you used the word "dad" too much throughout this but then again there are not so many names that you called call your father. I loved the ryhme it was on flow, your word choice was simple yet effective. None the less I liked the emotion you portrayed in this poem it was strong and powerful and I do see you wrote this out of anger. Well done. An enjoyable read with a twist on a fathersday poem. ~mel