Comments : Alvina Marsha (acrostic)

  • 10 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    It was so sweet and touching..And you did a good job even though it is your first acrostic poem as you told in the deal..And I loved teh wording,it was eliminated for sure..and the flow was great
    Keep it up,
    Laura

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Great, you have wrote this perfectly. very nicely written....

    by the way, acrostic is my favorite style.
    keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by beautiful xx disaster

    Wow. this is really cute <3
    its sad but i think it is still amazing.
    i normally really dislike the way some people wrte Acrostic poems because i think they always make them seem like really random sentences, but in this poem you captured the whole point of Acrostic poems... you don't have to base the poem around the letters, you can base the letters around the poem.
    its really good... keep up the good work.
    5/5
    <3jess

  • 10 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Dang!!! ur hav lik awesome word choice(did u cheat and look in the dictionary?) some words i donk even know lik the first line..wow..awsome..haha

  • 10 years ago

    by XxJennyxX

    Aww this is really sweet. Unfortunte that she dunst feel the same but keep writin.. a really liked it
    <3 Jenni xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Lozbi

    Naww that's very sweet.. =]]
    5/5
    .x

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittney

    Beautiful poem. I tend not to like acrostic poems very much, but I loved this one. Your a great writer. Keep up the good work. Oh, and hopefully things will get better with "her". Wish you the best.
    *Brittney

  • 10 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Great use of words very well written 5/5 keep it up

    laura

  • 10 years ago

    by Mousie

    Beautiful, you really took acrostic to the next level, congrats. great write

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    To begin with, I commend you for writing a formed poetry, which I dearly am fond of--Acrostic. You grasped my attention with the poem's admirable lines and phrases, especially the beginning line. Additional props for the fine word choice as well as for writing a tribute for a love unrequited. I, however, noticed the redundancy of the poetic phrases you used, as follows:

    "Aura of pulchritude," ~ "Light of beauty,"

    "Incalculable loves," ~ "Numerous affections,"

    I further had observed how this piece lacked poetic rhythm and flow whereby it made it quite difficult for me to connect to it. It's a fine Acrostic, nevertheless. Thanks for sharing. ~Marian

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    I know how you feel! And your feelings really show in your poem! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Mel

    I dont know a whole lot about these kinds of poems.....

    but good word choice, and i like the contrasts. its sad too. good job.

  • 10 years ago

    by Kara P

    That was really sweet and touching, and had a nice flow.
    Good job!
    :)
    KAra

  • 10 years ago

    by BrokenREALiTy

    Beautiful lines . You chose the vocabulary carefully, and it worked out nice . I don't read these type of poems often, but you really make me want to read more . It lacked some flow, but it's good either way .
    ..__MiNDYY

  • 10 years ago

    by lexie

    Wow,that was so sweet & heartfelt.
    the flow was really good,the love was definitly there.5/5 great write.
    --lexie

  • 10 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Wow man, its seldom that i come across other people with good vocabulary in here. cheers to that. and this was an excellent write. i espeicaly liked the first and last lines.

    (: Tom

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Wow very nice, well adhered to the rule and well penned. I love Acrostics and Etherees. Great 5/5 keep it up. tc

  • 10 years ago

    by Sarlee

    Very simple with a good strong deep ending. love it =]

  • 10 years ago

    by Hebe

    Such a sweet poem.
    Beautiful piece of writing.
    Hope things will work out with 'her'
    Best wishes, take care

  • 10 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow, it was so sweet, i'm sorry that you dont think she feels the same way, it was such a lovely acrostic, well done. 5/5