Comments : Butterfly With Midnight Wings

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    This poem is great, wording is superb and atmosphere that you created is amazing. You really described nature very good. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    This poem was deffinatly diffrent. and i love diffrent :) it made me smile. good work

    i especially loved the lines

    "The morning broke the dancing,
    As warmth stole the dark,
    Unhidden from the eyes,
    And subsided from their hark,

    Leaving all but ripples,
    The moon now unseen,
    No music and no dance,
    No knowing of what been.
    "

    i read them over a million times. it had great rythem and a gentle tone. good work

    (ps- i don't vote because i think ths voting system is corrupt)

  • 10 years ago

    by WiNgS Of StEeL

    Wow..u have a gre8 poem..i love i:D
    the flwo and the imagery was awesome aswell
    keep up the gr8 work
    tk care
    bree

  • 10 years ago

    by Lady Vengeance

    Hey moo moo. this is ... well.... amazing. it was beautiful and descriptive. i love everything about it. i love you. cya tomorrow sweetie.
    -Snoo xox

  • 10 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    This was beautiful. I loved how descriptive and peaceful it was. The flow was great, it made for a very pleasant read. I do feel like there's some punctuation missing through out, but nothing serious lol. Great write, 5/5

    marcella

  • 10 years ago

    by Mo

    This was really beautiful! What a lovely midsummer nights dream type of picture it formed in my mind. Very creative and very different.

    Loved it (5/5)

    One thing tho - in the last stanza -
    Leaving all but ripples,
    The moon now unseen,
    No music and no dance,
    No knowing of what been.

    I think you should make the last line "No knowing of what had been" - just a suggestion.

    Mo

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Very beautiful and descriptive. The title is very captivating, and the poem didn't disappoint me at all. You created gorgeous and very vivid imagery.
    Keep up, 5/5 from me.

  • 10 years ago

    by firexdancer

    I loved this, it gave a perfect picture of the poem, so vivid and bright. and it flowed very well and smoothly, it was just absolutely beautiful.
    5/5
    gabriella

  • 10 years ago

    by mnemosyne

    I absolutely love this piece! It is very
    cleverly written, with perfect flow, beautiful
    imagery and descriptions and wonderful vocab.

    The third stanza is my favorite! (:
    Excellent write! Keep it up!

    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Okay. I frikken love this.
    The imagery you painted in this was awesome, it creates very vivid images for me, it was like I could see and hear everything that was happening.
    The flow is perfect throughout the entire piece and the ending was beautifully wrapped up.
    Just...beautiful.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    I love it. though the last three stanzas werent as good as the rest... I'm not saying they're bad. >.< I'm just saying i dont like them as much as the rest. I felt like the rhyme scheme was messed up. that's the only reason.

    other than that, I totally dig it. nicely written. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by NearlyCrazy6

    So pretty
    I love it!
    Great job

  • 9 years ago

    by Bradley Peter

    I think the best two things about this poem was the rhymes and the imagery you created. I can't quite choose between the first and third stanzas, and so I'll jsu have to say like them both equally and that they are both my favorite stanzas.

    Brad

  • 9 years ago

    by Quietly Versed

    I'm truly, for the first time, jealous of someone else's poem. Amazing piece of work. I was engulfed with imagery and simply reading the poem soothed the very depth of my inner most self. I am not kidding, i love this life giving piece of art.

  • 9 years ago

    by Joshua Lee

    Loves it :3