Comments : Handle It With Care [Triolet]

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Beautifully penned poem, The flow was smooth, I like your choice of words

    My heart is breakable.
    Without you, it's unbearable.
    ^^I find these two lines powerful ^_^

    5/5! good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Although I find the following line particularly fragmented: "Without love, I'm unable.", I think you've written this adorable work quite well and made justice to the form you'd brought into play. There is nothing else that I can further say other than its lovely and utterly endearing. A joy to read, nevertheless. :] 5/5

    Best wishes,
    Marian

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Overall this is a nice poem with good wordings and you have well adhered to the rule. Keep it up. tc